Day 2658a/b

Day 2658a
God bless the oft-passed,
much maligned, and made fun of
driving instructor
– – – – –
Day 2658b
from my vantage point –
a great lake dotted with small sails;
my right – trees, sunset.
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2 Responses to Day 2658a/b

  1. Al Don Vey says:

    First line may be unnecessary information which know by reading the rest. The semi colon and punctuation is not normally used in the haikuIi read. The last line could be” sunset–trees on(or to) my right”. There ought to be something better than that last line above, but it is not coming to me.

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